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missing serial commas #6

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wolftune opened this issue Oct 4, 2019 · 3 comments
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missing serial commas #6

wolftune opened this issue Oct 4, 2019 · 3 comments

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wolftune commented Oct 4, 2019

I fixed one in #4

but rather than just submit more PRs (having not gotten a reply there yet), I'm opening this to point out cases of missing serial commas for consideration:

  • under "Basic Concepts": "Drivers, Value and Waste" and "Domains, Delegation and Accountability" both seem to need the serial comma.

Without the serial comma, it can be read like "Drivers: Value and Waste" and "Domains: Delegation and Accountability". I don't think that's the intention (but if it is, the colon would be better).

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wolftune commented Oct 4, 2019

Another case:

"The Principle of Consent: Raise, seek out and resolve objections to decisions and actions."

The serial comma would go after "seek out,"

However, I'd suggest an easier to parse definition:

"The Principle of Consent: Raise and seek out objections to decisions and actions. Then, work to resolve them."

or similar. That is longer but easier to read and to follow as a pattern.

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wolftune commented Oct 4, 2019

Value is the importance, worth or usefulness…

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wolftune commented Oct 4, 2019

a unit, department, team or individuals

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